Hows these lyrics?

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Ends Meet (Song Name)

America is not what it seems
We all hope and dream
But it never turns out the way its supposed to be
Familys barley making ends meet
Hanging on to their bonds while they eat
And people wonder why this Countrys obese

Some of the people in this world don't even know what its like
To have to fk random people in your life
Just to make ends meet for the night
So their children can live another day in light
I haven't met one person in my life
Who wouldn't die for their childrens' lives
Now I'm not saying that some people wouldn't
I'm just lucky that I haven't
And I really hope that never happens
Cause if it does, I might explode
And become corroded and corrupt
From something that should of never blown up
But this world is so fked up

America is not what it seems
We all hope and dream
But it never turns out the way its supposed to be
Familys barley making ends meet
Hanging on to their bonds while they eat
And people wonder why this Countrys obese

But you shouldn't be recognizing that
You should be moving forward on your own path
Because right now your just moving towards death
And its just a big mess

So just recap and rethink
Cause this worlds going to sink
Before my eyes, In a blink.


So how does that sound? made it up today/yesterday kinda. Got bored. Just want some feed back I guess.

Pretty nice but work on keeping to poetry bit more, strofes and stuff.

SureShot wrote:

Pretty nice but work on keeping to poetry bit more, strofes and stuff.

thanks

you made them ?

ToTheTop wrote:

you made them ?

Yes.

Anyone else ganna comment? Sorry for double post.

Hello so anybody like these lyrics or are they even good ?

How about these ?

I get bored sometimes and just rap .

Do you know me ? I don't think you do .
So just listen to the story I'ma bout to tell you .

This world it makes your heart hard and cold .
It also makes you greedy and a homofobe .
It doesn't matter if you're young or old .
It's like poker , do you go or fold ?
Should you raise or throw ?
Even if your against the thrown ?
So you hold on to all hope and you hone .
You want this fight , you just don't wanna lose it tho .
Its like the string on a bow .
Theres two outcomes , you just gotta go with the flow .
Even if you shoot the arrow its just so dam slow .

sounds more like poetry

Did you really make that lyrics?

ToTheTop wrote:

sounds more like poetry

I just used a lot of words in a rhythmical pattern but say it really fast kinda like rap cause thats what its suppose to be . :p

SouL wrote:

Did you really make that lyrics?

Both of them :p .